[She looks it over, and already, she's fixing some of those typos. She looks no less impressed, however.]
This is pretty detailed, but... I think this part is confusing.
Let's word it like this.
[And she starts to correct some parts too that aren't as clear as either of them would like. She'll only make the changes if he's okay with them, of course... meaning she'll read off everything she's typing, and wait for his okay.]
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This is pretty detailed, but... I think this part is confusing.
Let's word it like this.
[And she starts to correct some parts too that aren't as clear as either of them would like. She'll only make the changes if he's okay with them, of course... meaning she'll read off everything she's typing, and wait for his okay.]